Here's my thoughts on her speech:
(It's probably going to get deleted, but whatever)

I thought it was fine, as in passable fine.
It's as if she took the Democratic platform as put her own spin in it, for the lack of a better word. She talked about an immigrant's struggles, which is fine, I was expecting that. Then it's about her and her achievements...fine, this felt like a resume.

Her speech is going fine about more than halfway through, and then it's sort of feels like a draft paper around when she starts wingmaning for the Democrats.
If she is going to start a career in politics and in the Senate (it's obvious she's going there from this speech), this might be the kind of criticism she'll encounter.

And another thing, I wish she would refer to herself as a former-dreamer. The reason for that is that she's able to do things we can only dream of doing. She's an LPR for Christ's sake. It's clear that there is a world beyond the one we live now and she's shown us that, regardless of her knowing or not.